Parenting Teenagers (12-18) Support Group
This community is focused on the joys, challenges and concerns faced by parents of teenagers (12 to 18 year olds). The major areas of child development include: physical development, perception and sensory development, communication and language development, cognitive development, emotional development and social development.
http://www.studential.com/personalstatements/default.asp
http://www.english.soton.ac.uk/ucasform.htm
Also, there are tutors who can help with this as well. You should check the yellow pages or even Craigs list!
Good Luck!
http://www.amazon.co.uk/Write-Successful-University-Personal-Statement/dp/0955674611
You don't have to be trying to get into a top college for these books to help. THe second breaks the several types of essays there are. It's a great starting point. The first one (Friske) takes you through the application process by hand.