Hey X, take care of yourself. There is also beauty and wonder in both apples and life.

That's very stark and forceful. As a poet I know that sometimes a poem is just a poem, a word play on a thought however fleeting. Be fleet of feet, life is sweet.

Keep writing it all out, won't you?

..does it help? x

Hey, this and some of your other writing can be disturbing, but you are a very good writer. I like your visuals and the way you capture sentiments. Please don't think about following through on any of this, however. It seems that you could have a bright future and writing could be a big part of that.

Why not write something that expresses what it would take to make life worth living? If you could have anything what would it take to turn the negatives of life around? In my cases, and at this particular moment, it's very easy. Give me a job and/or enough money to make all of my financial bull crap go away. * Double, double, toil & trouble *

I don't think you need to change anything about the way that you write.
I prefer dismal poetry over that bullshit optimistic crap. Keep writing. You have some talent. Just like the other one said don't follow through on those thoughts there. I would miss your dark poetry.

X; I have visited that same pit more than once. Something dark always pushes me there, never pulling or coaxing but pushing like a cop into the back of a squad car. Each time I find myself down there submitting and letting go of my purpose, I take one last look up and inevitable I see light. Sometimes it's the sun sometimes an unwelcome rescuer, sometimes it's just my dog peering over the edge hoping this is not our last goodbye. But I always end up back on solid ground, even if only for a few short weeks. Next time your in that pit and have given up your purpose... take one last look at the light above you. You might be surprised at who is waiting there to help you back out again.