These are two poems i wrote during my english exam just before christmas. Their not that good and need some touching up but i thought i'd share them anyways.Silence!Silently laying herenot a sound nearSilently laying herenot one weep will you hearSilently standing hereas i watched ou leaveI wont make a sound.You can not hear me I do not speakyou cannot hearall those tears i weepYou'll never know howmuch i loved you for i will not make a sound.Hidden!Hidden within meall the pain i feel,hidden within meall the tears i cried,Hidden within meall the anger that i feel,Hidden within me my past & memories,Hidden within meall that i've seen.I'm all black inside because its the only way i canhide all the things i dont want you to see or know.I'm a time bomb just waiting toEXPLODE!
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i wish you would explode with the love and tenderness and kindness and beauty, that i see in you. there is so much love and compassion in you to give to this world. i\'m sorry your hurting and feel this way. i wish i could make it change; i would if i could. your writing is as always, excellant. i wish you wrote about feeling better one day.
may all the blessings be yours.
dennis
they are very good sis. love you
A sad little lady you obviously are. Beautiful poems of a lonely, but beautiful young lady. Now produce a couple of poems for me that depict the unloved child you desire to be. I look forward to reading them, ensure the same passion exists within them as those above. Luv ya. YumYumChum.
They are good, but I would love to see some like YumYumChum said. What do you wish your life was like if it could be anyway other than how it is now? That would be really interesting to read. Go for it Becka! I love you so much! Robin xoxooxoxox
Beautiful...
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You are very talented hon, but so sad and for that I am sorry. Wish I could take away all the bad and help you find some sunshine in there. It will be okay honey, just get it out, it is very good to talk! I love you hon, mum xx
You have talent with words... may Love be the joy that reaches your heart. God\'s Love
I C HERE U HAVE A MUM XX, WOW, THAT IS AWESOME, YOU HAVE SO MANY MUMS THAT LOVE U, the poems were really good, but i would love to see one where u can think of a good time, ur so talented and blessed my daughter and i,m so blessed to have u as MY DAUGHTER ONE OF UR MUM,S, LOVE U , YA KNOW WILDTHING!