Here another poem that i wrote...i wrote this one in 2003 not sure of the exact date but i hope you all like it...I've decided after this one i'm only going to post 1 a week...this is because it will give people more time to read them and hopefully it will touch someone out there and help them to realise there not alone...Well here it is.DarknessI'm swimming all alone in a pool of darknessand I feel like darkness is slowly pulling me underI yell for help but no one is there to hear itI begin to see the water at eye leveland I kick and failfighting to stay above the darknessBut the darkness won't let go of its hold on meand I slowly begin to give into the feeling that lies below the water linethe waters starts to fill my lungsthe lungs that once held so much lifeyet now they allow the murky water to replace thatI know that this path doesn't lead to happinessBut why doesn't someone grab my handpull me from darkness's grasp?because no one knows I stand at the boundarythe boundary between light and darkso I give in to the thing that holds meAll of the strength and all of the couragethat I once held in my heartcan't save me from the waterSo I slowly slip below the world of conscientiousnessundetected by the occupants of that worldI don't want to fight anymoreI've given into darkness Luv You All...Becka xoxox

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wow! when i read that this was from 2003, i said this may not be so great, because that would make you 11 or 12 years old. it\'s impossible for you to have this much talent or this much incite at such a young age and yet you clearly do. i cant write this and i\'m allot older than you. this is one of the most chilling and yet spell-binding pieces i have ever read. this is a perfect representation of what happens at times. becka, i bow to your talent and bravery and courage to face these things and put them to words. this is simply a beautiful piece...and yet i hate the thing that has brought you this pain.
all my heart.
dennis
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dont worry bout me i\'m fine...like i said i\'m posting them here to help others and i hope that i do manage to do that...i wouldnt say it was a talent at all i would just say you have to put your mind to it...you can do it dennis if you really really want to just try :)...i must admit though my last few i wrote were abit crap but i will still post them...take care...with luv becka xoxox
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It\'s a wonderful poem. You\'re very gifted
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becka..i also suppose that everyone that tells you how good this really is ....is lying or faking it, or whatever huh. princess....just write someplace please. thanks, i needed to hear that, or thanks, your comments made me feel good.. you deserve credit when you do beautiful things, accept it, and bath in those words. no one gets enough of them these days. you deserve them.
all my love.
dennis
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helOoeee.... Your pOems are wOnderful... it expresses hOw peOple actually feel!.. keep up the gOod wOrk (:.... x
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wow! oh my gosh! thats amazing ur sooo talented.
how old were you when u wrote that? its fantastic!!
ily :] x
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becka its a beautiful poem!! i thoroughly enjoyed reading it. its a pleasure to read your poems.
with love,
jeena
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That is BEAUTIFUL! I can relate to the feeling 100%... if there is anything I can do to help you not give into the darkness that has its grasp on you let me know. I will take your hand if you let me.
HUGS
Izzy
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WONDERDFUL :)
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your really talented. i write peotry too. my friends call me a genius. lol. keep it up. hug and kiss
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that\'s such an amazing poem. you have an amazing talent
Love and hugs, Loui xxx