hakumai's Journal

I am glad to say that I have completed the final draft of my Expository essay. Actually, I have finished the paper a week or two ago and I have not updated this journal. Sorry about that! But, my professor has handed back my paper and my final grade for the course; I received a C+ on my paper and a C as a final grade.

The course itself had stepping stones for me to follow. For example, I had to write an abstract and annotated bibliography as initial steps to determine what topic we should write about. (I forget to mention that the course focuses on any topic about Fashion.) I believed that finding information and selecting a topic and question/thesis to be the most difficult. I switched from body image to eating disorders to sports/tennis. It was a nightmare for me. I honestly could not decide. Fortunately, my professor suggested I attend tutoring sessions and tutoring helped a lot! So, after deciding on the topic, plus size women and fashion, I continued writing my abstract, collected internet, scholarly books, scholarly articles for the annotated bibliography. This all helped me write my proposal about what my paper would be about. After that, I had to write a first, second, and final draft. The proposal, I received a C and the second draft, I received a C/C+. So, there was a tiny improvement. My main problem that the professor kept mentioning was that I lacked a focus and I agreed with her. So, the final paper, I adjusted everything. I felt good about the paper, especially when I handed in the paper and presented what I wrote. The presentation went terrible. I was not focused at all! I thought I was before the class because my ideas were all on paper. I just had to explain what I wrote, but when I spoke, I stumbled a lot in my speech and I had long pauses where I flipped through my essay, looking for things to talk about. Overall, I was not prepared and shame on me. I could feel my classmates wanting to get out of class. I was the last presenter and I felt that I will just end my presentation.

So, after picking up my paper and rereading through what I wrote, I realized a made a major, major mistake. My paper was supposed to be about eplaining why I thought that there is an increased interest in plus size fashion and I thought I was listing my ideas. But, as I reread my paper, I realized that I kept mentioning issues that plus size people faced about the fashion, like the fit of the clothes, the designs, the limited colors and sizes for plus size. In my mind, I was saying "ahhhhh!!" Yes, this shows the importance of rereading your papers before handing them in.

Thank you for reading! Completion Essay!